Doll Face Cosmetics

The boy stood before the mirror,
not sure who it was,
not sure who he became.
He wanted to be like her big sister.
She had cared for him more than anyone.
She was so pretty,
face covered with cosmetics.
He became a man.
He wanted his father to be proud
but he would not be a man,
Throughout his life he never felt like that who he was.
As his hand reached for the bottle of clear liquid
he realized that if her father really cared for him,
accept it for who he was.
The new boy in school had it out for an evening of fun.
His parents did not yet know the boy was more than just friends,
but they would be soon enough.
As he looked in the image staring back at him,
he began to cover her face with her sister up.
It adds the color of his eyes, cheeks and lips.
The new thinking that had produced a whole lot clearer.
Her skin was much paler overall,
it resembled a porcelain doll.
as he spilled a wig
and wearing clothes of her sister,
he decided he did not like what his father thought.
It could be a beautiful woman or handsome man
and his father would have to rely thereafter.
He felt pride as he descended the stairs to go with her boyfriend,
and greet his father who he wanted to become ...
beautiful china.

These are stories, not poems. Bravo for what they are, but I doubt they would be of interest to anyone over 22 years. I give you a 7, both for him and the suicide girl.

wow. definitely tell an interesting story. I love it when a poem. i write poetry too, but it ... Me does not believe in perfect if I can not give a dime. I say 9. ru available? cuz u should be.wow.

wow what can I say that no less than 10

Wow .. It makes you get these strange feelings inside you as you read it.It 's like you say "Why cannot people like me for me and who I've become?


Good Job, I give him a .. 10

9, very good! true story?

wow .. 9

is a great poem!

is good 7

thats pretty good. I'd give him a 8 very high, with nearly 9. you're a good poet. keep it!

I think it could be really good thats 90000000000000000

You are insisting on the word "It" may be too much and he is talking about the personal direction rather than to achieve personal.
I have two poems published nationally. " For security reasons I can not give my real name, but write me on e-mail and I'll give the poems.

Well

poem tranny interesting .... 7

it's good I'd say 9

Wow ..... Thats was interesting! I do not know how much I liked the story because of all this, but I now write a 10 for sure!

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